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Poems
07-08-2013, 04:55 AM, (This post was last modified: 07-08-2013, 04:56 AM by Jerome.)
#1
Poems
General poem thread

Here's one of mine,
I haven't been writing lately and I looked through my poems and a lot of them were really bad but here's my best.
All you need to know is that it's about a girl in my class.

You told some of your stories, i told some of mine.
Even though i didn't laugh, i really had a great time.
Something of which I, never had before.
Until you were there, washing up on my shore.
Your skin was torn, clothes weren't there.
Something of which you, weren't fully aware.
I didn't have to help you, which i didn't understand.
So i stood there wondering, as you tried to crawl on land.
Aan de oevers van de tijd,

hing ik maar wat rond.
07-10-2013, 07:16 AM, (This post was last modified: 07-10-2013, 07:32 AM by PhillipStounn.)
#2
RE: Poems
Thanks for scarring my happy self,
thanks for putting me in a lower shelf.
Thanks to you who lacks self confidence,
Oh, i'm sorry. I've never seen you so dense.
All i want from you is the warmest word,
but all i had are the verbal knives that stab through my vital cord.
I've been realising that you've been tarnishing people,
Labeling yourself as awesome, but to them as the sheeple.
I thought you were one of the people of the light,
now i've realised you have faked the sight.
I could have defended myself from you very fast,
or maybe you should just get a brain lobotomy before your life will last.
And if you didn't really just snap yourself out of it,
you'll forever become as ignorant. That's it.
we slip through mansions with fences full-grown.
we slip through streetlights in crooked rows.
I saw the sky split in two: one half jealous and one half cruel.

Camouflage, Camouflage by The Blood Brothers
07-10-2013, 07:33 AM,
#3
RE: Poems
(07-10-2013, 07:16 AM)PhillipStounn Wrote: Thanks for scarring my happy self,
thanks for putting me in a lower shelf.
Thanks to you who lacks self confidence,
Oh, i'm sorry. I've never seen you so dense.
All i want from you is the warmest word,
but all i had are the verbal knives that stab through my vital cord.
I've been realising that you've been tarnishing people,
Labeling yourself as awesome, but to them as the sheeple.
I thought you were one of the people of the light,
now i've realised you have faked the sight.
I could have defended myself from you very fast,
or maybe you should just get a brain lobotomy before your life will last.
And if you didn't really just snap yourself out of it,
you'll forever become as ignorant. That's it.

Nice poem, was struggling readin the confidence to dense line because it sounded weird in my mind. for the rest it's really good!
Who's it about?
Aan de oevers van de tijd,

hing ik maar wat rond.
07-10-2013, 09:21 AM, (This post was last modified: 04-02-2014, 07:40 AM by PhillipStounn.)
#4
RE: Poems
(07-10-2013, 07:33 AM)Jerome Wrote:
(07-10-2013, 07:16 AM)PhillipStounn Wrote: Thanks for scarring my happy self,
thanks for putting me in a lower shelf.
Thanks to you who lacks self confidence,
Oh, i'm sorry. I've never seen you so dense.
All i want from you is the warmest word,
but all i had are the verbal knives that stab through my vital cord.
I've been realising that you've been tarnishing people,
Labeling yourself as awesome, but to them as the sheeple.
I thought you were one of the people of the light,
now i've realised you have faked the sight.
I could have defended myself from you very fast,
or maybe you should just get a brain lobotomy before your life will last.
And if you didn't really just snap yourself out of it,
you'll forever become as ignorant. That's it.

Nice poem, was struggling readin the confidence to dense line because it sounded weird in my mind. for the rest it's really good!
Who's it about?

it's about being betrayed who's at first being nice to you and then quickly turns egotistical.
07-13-2013, 08:16 AM,
#5
RE: Poems
(07-10-2013, 09:21 AM)PhillipStounn Wrote:
(07-10-2013, 07:33 AM)Jerome Wrote:
(07-10-2013, 07:16 AM)PhillipStounn Wrote: Thanks for scarring my happy self,
thanks for putting me in a lower shelf.
Thanks to you who lacks self confidence,
Oh, i'm sorry. I've never seen you so dense.
All i want from you is the warmest word,
but all i had are the verbal knives that stab through my vital cord.
I've been realising that you've been tarnishing people,
Labeling yourself as awesome, but to them as the sheeple.
I thought you were one of the people of the light,
now i've realised you have faked the sight.
I could have defended myself from you very fast,
or maybe you should just get a brain lobotomy before your life will last.
And if you didn't really just snap yourself out of it,
you'll forever become as ignorant. That's it.

Nice poem, was struggling readin the confidence to dense line because it sounded weird in my mind. for the rest it's really good!
Who's it about?

Thanks I guess to me it's about some guy under the name railpressureflip whom i thought was a nice guy until he began trolling on me whenever i post some mallcore bands on my facebook post. I wrote this when i was completely shaken of the sarcastic comments he writes to troll one of my friends and even blocked me on facebook. i had to stress out by writing this.

Funny, I thought it was about someone who deceived you.
Maybe the words were too heavy for the subject of matter, I mean, you don't need big words for small things.
Aan de oevers van de tijd,

hing ik maar wat rond.
07-13-2013, 07:51 PM, (This post was last modified: 04-02-2014, 07:45 AM by PhillipStounn.)
#6
RE: Poems
(07-13-2013, 08:16 AM)Jerome Wrote:
(07-10-2013, 09:21 AM)PhillipStounn Wrote:
(07-10-2013, 07:33 AM)Jerome Wrote:
(07-10-2013, 07:16 AM)PhillipStounn Wrote: Thanks for scarring my happy self,
thanks for putting me in a lower shelf.
Thanks to you who lacks self confidence,
Oh, i'm sorry. I've never seen you so dense.
All i want from you is the warmest word,
but all i had are the verbal knives that stab through my vital cord.
I've been realising that you've been tarnishing people,
Labeling yourself as awesome, but to them as the sheeple.
I thought you were one of the people of the light,
now i've realised you have faked the sight.
I could have defended myself from you very fast,
or maybe you should just get a brain lobotomy before your life will last.
And if you didn't really just snap yourself out of it,
you'll forever become as ignorant. That's it.

Nice poem, was struggling readin the confidence to dense line because it sounded weird in my mind. for the rest it's really good!
Who's it about?

it's about being betrayed who's at first being nice to you and then quickly turns egotistical.

Funny, I thought it was about someone who deceived you.
Maybe the words were too heavy for the subject of matter, I mean, you don't need big words for small things.

Well, you're a faggot, afterall.
07-14-2013, 08:44 AM,
#7
RE: Poems
(07-13-2013, 08:16 AM)Jerome Wrote: Funny, I thought it was about someone who deceived you.
Maybe the words were too heavy for the subject of matter, I mean, you don't need big words for small things.

Sometimes you do, if you feel really bad about "small" things.
07-14-2013, 08:17 PM,
#8
RE: Poems
(07-14-2013, 08:44 AM)Little Funny Boy Wrote:
(07-13-2013, 08:16 AM)Jerome Wrote: Funny, I thought it was about someone who deceived you.
Maybe the words were too heavy for the subject of matter, I mean, you don't need big words for small things.

Sometimes you do, if you feel really bad about "small" things.

True, in the heat of the moment maybe.
Afterwards you look back at it and think, ''Man, was I overreacting.''
Atleast that's my experience..
Aan de oevers van de tijd,

hing ik maar wat rond.
07-14-2013, 10:32 PM,
#9
RE: Poems
(07-14-2013, 08:17 PM)Jerome Wrote: True, in the heat of the moment maybe.
Afterwards you look back at it and think, ''Man, was I overreacting.''
Atleast that's my experience..

Lol, I actually laugh after I overreact.
08-22-2013, 04:23 AM,
#10
RE: Poems
Well, I posted a poem written by a very old, very dead Punjabi poet twice on this board already. Link right here -> http://www.poemhunter.com/best-poems/bul...-who-i-am/

It was adapted into a folk rock song back in 2005.




Traditionally, it's considered to be a kafi (classical form of Sufi song/poetry). The author was Bullah Shah, who lived in the mid 1700s I believe. I remember learning in Sunday School at the local gurudwara, that this poem was considered to be a timeless work. The teacher said that no matter how wrapped up we get in our lives, how much our experiences separate us from others, we're all human. Even though we were all Sikhs, we had to love our fellow humans as if they were our brothers and sisters be that if they were all Musulmans, Hindus, Jews, Christians, or even Satanists.

If you want some more examples of kafis, just look em up. Below is an example. Sufism is very interesting, and the music is bar none, some of the most beautiful I've ever heard.





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